Eloquence

Be Concise! Be Concise! Be Concise!

This is what my literature professor at college used to tell us before our assignments.

But how can we be concise while writing a story! We have to portray a vivid world, of colors (or, uncolored), of different people, of scenes, of meadows and mountains and emotions and fingertips touching. A portrait of that lady in the background, sitting on the other table, sipping her fresh coffee and wiping her mouth with her napkin.

And we have to be concise! To choose our words, our descriptions, our metaphors, wisely. Stringing pieces of words to for a coherent sentence to be read as a poem.

Aaaaaaaagh!

It isn’t only in writing prose, no. Writing blogs, and commenting on them, is probably now one of the most frequent activities any person with access to the Sphere does in a day.

And I am a victim of not being concise! Even though I was trained to be, especially in the British school I spent my whole school years in!

But why do we write on and on and on and on… talk a lot but say very little?

Is it because we think too many words prove our point? Or is it because you feel like you haven’t said enough?

For me, personally, I feel I haven’t said enough! Even though I can reword a paragraph into three sentences, and make it more powerful.

I went back to my emails and saw an enormous, 1500 word email sent to one of the PMs in the company last year to explain a mishap. It is a good thing I summarized the whole essay in bullet points in the end, and I thought to myself, why haven’t I just emailed the bullet points?

It is because I felt I haven’t explained enough, which was not the case.

And I am still a victim of this, as you can see how much I have elaborated on the issue when I could have written only a couple of paragraphs on it!

  • Nada

    Hi KJ, it is Nada…since i studied English literatue, i know exactly what you are talking about, it is just not easy for people who love and study literature to just say it in one word, we love to write as much as we can, it could be that words make us feel better, it is sometimes a way to let things go…i think we enjoy it this way; however, it really requires a certain mood, u cannot be expressive if you don’t feel like it, people differ, imagin if all people can say what the want or think In one word, sentence or a paragraph, i think life would have been boring :)so keep saying things the way you want because believe me there are people who love enad enjoy listening to what you are saying or writingit…good luck :)

  • Nada

    Hi KJ, it is Nada…since i studied English literatue, i know exactly what you are talking about, it is just not easy for people who love and study literature to just say it in one word, we love to write as much as we can, it could be that words make us feel better, it is sometimes a way to let things go…i think we enjoy it this way; however, it really requires a certain mood, u cannot be expressive if you don’t feel like it, people differ, imagin if all people can say what the want or think In one word, sentence or a paragraph, i think life would have been boring :)so keep saying things the way you want because believe me there are people who love enad enjoy listening to what you are saying or writingit…good luck :)

  • starwish

    My sentiments exactly!

  • starwish

    My sentiments exactly!

  • Kaileena

    LOL! E 3adi same here! Sometimes when I’m telling a story my friends get into so many arguments with me about getting to the point and how I do it everytime that we forget I was telling the story in the first place!

  • Kaileena

    LOL! E 3adi same here! Sometimes when I’m telling a story my friends get into so many arguments with me about getting to the point and how I do it everytime that we forget I was telling the story in the first place!

  • Batoul A.

    I’m like that with my “because” and “but”. Until I had to do my clinical practice. Trying to state the condition of a patient to my co-workers was a long paragraph until one day one doctor had it and began to say “gimme ONE useful sentence about the patient” :S

    In the begining, one sentence sounded rediculous. I had to explain a patient’s whole status in one. Sometimes they could be run-ons but they do the job and possibly save lives. So I learned that I could get the same point through with less.

    In a professional setting its great but I dont know about personal ones. Saying less could be misunderstood. Elaboration is a wonderful thing that avoids misconceptions in day to day settings.

    This has been my longest comment yet and it’s about being concise, how ironic lol

  • Batoul A.

    I’m like that with my “because” and “but”. Until I had to do my clinical practice. Trying to state the condition of a patient to my co-workers was a long paragraph until one day one doctor had it and began to say “gimme ONE useful sentence about the patient” :S In the begining, one sentence sounded rediculous. I had to explain a patient’s whole status in one. Sometimes they could be run-ons but they do the job and possibly save lives. So I learned that I could get the same point through with less. In a professional setting its great but I dont know about personal ones. Saying less could be misunderstood. Elaboration is a wonderful thing that avoids misconceptions in day to day settings. This has been my longest comment yet and it’s about being concise, how ironic lol

  • Hamza

    what you are going through is normal. The thing is you are socially deprived of those ppl who understand you. And that’s why you feel the need to reiterate your points to the ppl who don’t.

    its ok. I am worse than you. and I reiterate more than once even if ther person assures me that he/she understands. Its just I want him/her to assure me even more

  • Hamza

    what you are going through is normal. The thing is you are socially deprived of those ppl who understand you. And that’s why you feel the need to reiterate your points to the ppl who don’t.its ok. I am worse than you. and I reiterate more than once even if ther person assures me that he/she understands. Its just I want him/her to assure me even more

  • Qwaider قويدر

    Sometimes, it’s a necessary evil. Sometimes, it’s not.
    You know, it’s funny you should say that, just yesterday a friend of mine was told that her concise resume needs more elaboration. While another guy looked at it and thought, wow, that’s too wordy!

    Go figure :)

    Eloquence is an amazing talent, some people have, some people appreciate it .. but there are some who neither like it, nor appreciate it. So in the spirit of appealing to the masses, you need to be simple and that contradicts with eloquence most of the time

    :)

  • Qwaider قويدر

    Sometimes, it’s a necessary evil. Sometimes, it’s not.You know, it’s funny you should say that, just yesterday a friend of mine was told that her concise resume needs more elaboration. While another guy looked at it and thought, wow, that’s too wordy! Go figure :)Eloquence is an amazing talent, some people have, some people appreciate it .. but there are some who neither like it, nor appreciate it. So in the spirit of appealing to the masses, you need to be simple and that contradicts with eloquence most of the time:)

  • Maher

    LOOL! wallah hada elle bensaweeh bel exams! bnoktob meet alf kelmeh o beje el doc el 7elo el amoor bekoon bedawer 3ala kelmeh wa7deh!
    Zero!

    PS : dude, el english be hay el post mo se3eb ella shway o mo 3aref eza fhemto lal post aslan lol :P

  • Maher

    LOOL! wallah hada elle bensaweeh bel exams! bnoktob meet alf kelmeh o beje el doc el 7elo el amoor bekoon bedawer 3ala kelmeh wa7deh! Zero! PS : dude, el english be hay el post mo se3eb ella shway o mo 3aref eza fhemto lal post aslan lol :P

  • KJ

    Nada -
    Welcome to my blog! It is great to see your name here :) Yes you are right! We write to express and vent and we demand to write in as many words as we like! I too find it that the less I say, the more I become misunderstood. I believe though there is a point where what is said is sufficient, and it is that point that I need to learn not to cross!

    starwish -
    w00t!

    Kaileena -
    hahahaha! Sometimes happens to me, we switch topics back and forth and we forget what we are talking about. And we’re MEN! We’re not like that LOOL

  • KJ

    Nada -Welcome to my blog! It is great to see your name here :) Yes you are right! We write to express and vent and we demand to write in as many words as we like! I too find it that the less I say, the more I become misunderstood. I believe though there is a point where what is said is sufficient, and it is that point that I need to learn not to cross!starwish -w00t!Kaileena -hahahaha! Sometimes happens to me, we switch topics back and forth and we forget what we are talking about. And we’re MEN! We’re not like that LOOL

  • KJ

    Batoul -
    LOOOL Batoul that’s hilarious! I am imagining you in a Grey’s Anatomy setting with you being yelled at by your boss! Then you get upset and insert a scalpel in his nostril! HAHA

    Hamza -
    I am not socially deprived of people who understand me. Bel 3aks! But in writing, the tone of voice and your body movements are missing, so you need to be more elaborative with the way you write!

    Qwaider -
    It’s is difficult to ask someone complex to be simple! (is it?). The tough part is getting across what you want to get across regardless of the number of words. I personally love to read, so the more the better. There’s always a point though where sufficient information is given and repetition starts to take hold. You said it best that people see it differently.

    Maher -
    My English is very simple and clear but I think you are just messed up from your exams right now haha

  • KJ

    Batoul -LOOOL Batoul that’s hilarious! I am imagining you in a Grey’s Anatomy setting with you being yelled at by your boss! Then you get upset and insert a scalpel in his nostril! HAHAHamza -I am not socially deprived of people who understand me. Bel 3aks! But in writing, the tone of voice and your body movements are missing, so you need to be more elaborative with the way you write!Qwaider -It’s is difficult to ask someone complex to be simple! (is it?). The tough part is getting across what you want to get across regardless of the number of words. I personally love to read, so the more the better. There’s always a point though where sufficient information is given and repetition starts to take hold. You said it best that people see it differently.Maher -My English is very simple and clear but I think you are just messed up from your exams right now haha

  • asoom

    I’m the absolute worst at this, I don’t think it’ll ever change.

  • asoom

    I’m the absolute worst at this, I don’t think it’ll ever change.

  • eshda3wa

    thats the beauty of a blog

    u can rant all u want

    its urs!

    and people come to read out of their own accord.

    so there u have it

  • eshda3wa

    thats the beauty of a blogu can rant all u wantits urs!and people come to read out of their own accord.so there u have it